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Post by Tennisbollen on Feb 7, 2008 20:36:23 GMT 1
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Post by osiris on Feb 11, 2008 22:16:03 GMT 1
I just read your novel and it looked very good to me! Firstly I was thinking that you posted two different novels, than realized then it is one dvided in two pieces. What gave you inspiration for this? I would soon talk more about that cat we see walking in the woods near the house, but let's start discussing about other things before.
Then I will probably ask you to give me some days to better think about the novel, which I will need to post a more accurate feedback on what I read.
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Post by Tennisbollen on Feb 13, 2008 20:53:28 GMT 1
I just read your novel and it looked very good to me! Firstly I was thinking that you posted two different novels, than realized then it is one dvided in two pieces. What gave you inspiration for this? I would soon talk more about that cat we see walking in the woods near the house, but let's start discussing about other things before.
Then I will probably ask you to give me some days to better think about the novel, which I will need to post a more accurate feedback on what I read. We have a garden shed just outside in which my father chops wood for our fireplace. Not all too long ago we spotted a mouse there. The mouse probably made me think about cats, cats which have always scared me because of their eyes. This is how the story started to unfold, I'd guess. Sure, I'm not that impatient. What's funny is that I didn't see your post. I have been visiting this forum everyday to see if anyone commented my work and I hadn't seen this. Thanks anyway. - Tennisbollen
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Post by osiris on Feb 19, 2008 11:34:49 GMT 1
You haven't noticed my post probably because this forum has so many boards and looks so huge... Don't worry too much about the lack of feedback in which you may come across sometimes; forums members may be very lazy sometimes, but hopefully the situation will change soon.
So cats really scares you? However, see: when I read the first part of the novel I thought that that old man would have passed away at a point... What do you think about that?
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Post by Tennisbollen on Mar 12, 2008 18:36:43 GMT 1
You haven't noticed my post probably because this forum has so many boards and looks so huge... Don't worry too much about the lack of feedback in which you may come across sometimes; forums members may be very lazy sometimes, but hopefully the situation will change soon.
So cats really scares you? However, see: when I read the first part of the novel I thought that that old man would have passed away at a point... What do you think about that? Yes, I have noticed tha lack of member activity on other forums, it's a shame for such good forums. Anyways, cats kind of scare me yes, to be honest I don't understand what you mean about the last thing. However, I guess feedback for the new sequel in this series might go here as well, don't you think? - Tennisbollen
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Post by osiris on Mar 15, 2008 11:42:38 GMT 1
About inactive members: the situation is under my control, I'm going to spank who will not post the feedback that your work deserves!!! Back on your novel: reading it I had the impression that the old man would have been killed by some strange beast at a moment (maybe really the strange beast you described): it's just my impression or that was in your original plans for the story, so you changed the final? Feedback for the sequel will be posted as soon as possible; just give the time to read it, think about it, and I will let you know what I think about it.
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Post by Tennisbollen on Mar 15, 2008 17:46:16 GMT 1
I don't think that was my plans as I believe this story was unfolded while I was writing it. That's how I roll, I write stuff when they spring to my mind, having the story all lined up before makes me feel limited. I always love to see people's impressions of my work however, they simply cannot be incorrect, which makes it awesome. Thanks for reading and giving me your thoughts. - Tennisbollen
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Post by osiris on Mar 24, 2008 12:10:12 GMT 1
Ok, let's start feedback-ing the last chapter of your fiction, 'Good Bye' (I have added a link to it in your first post). Just a first impression for now, more stuff later. Well, at a first reading it sounds even better than the previous two chapters; and seems that it has turned into a quite good horror fiction now, right? Oh and I noticed that the old man dies at the end, I guess that this was inspired from what I wrote in my previous posts, I have always suspected that he would have passed away at point...
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Post by Tennisbollen on Mar 26, 2008 9:01:43 GMT 1
Ok, let's start feedback-ing the last chapter of your fiction, 'Good Bye' (I have added a link to it in your first post). Just a first impression for now, more stuff later. Well, at a first reading it sounds even better than the previous two chapters; and seems that it has turned into a quite good horror fiction now, right? Oh and I noticed that the old man dies at the end, I guess that this was inspired from what I wrote in my previous posts, I have always suspected that he would have passed away at point... Thank you, I always love getting feedback. Yeah, writing something horror-ish was something I had hoped for when I started writing this one. Stephen King being a major reason for that. Yes, he dies and yes it was somewhat inspired by your posts. Also, another guy who read it wanted it to be more bloody and I tend to kill my characters in the end if I don't know what to do with them. But yeah, thanks for not only giving me feedback but also inspiration. - Tennisbollen
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