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Post by Tennisbollen on Dec 18, 2007 17:42:25 GMT 1
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Post by osiris on Dec 18, 2007 20:54:20 GMT 1
Why not.
'The Maze' is quite good actually, the only thing that maybe doesn't sounds very good as the others is that "But you light up our haze / And help us out of the maze.", as that rhyme sounds like a bit hasty. However, i repeat, is quite a good poem which has its good moments and a nice touch of inspiration here and there.
I was quite surprised by that "Praise your Gods!" at the begin (maybe 'Gods' shouldn't be typed with a capital 'G' though), from where did you gathered inspiration for this poem? Who are the gods you're referring to?
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Post by Tennisbollen on Dec 18, 2007 21:47:15 GMT 1
In my opinion, does many of my rhymes sounds hasty and forced. I guess I wrote "Gods" to make it suit everyone, as I'm sure you are aware of; there are religions with several gods. About having a capital 'G', I wasn't sure if I should or not. The capital 'G' might just be used when refering to the Christian God. However, I don't refer to any special gods in my poem. I'm not religious myself and have no real relation to any. Thanks a lot for your comment, compliment and constructive criticism. - Tennisbollen
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