Post by rarayn on Nov 15, 2007 22:44:17 GMT 1
Feedback thread;
osiris01.proboards86.com/index.cgi?action=display&board=ficfeedback&thread=1195163106
A LOT longer than my usual ones, though written in a simmilar style...In one second I am rambling on MSN, and one and a half hour later I sit with a two page poem... = /
Enjoy!
A flaming eye
Darkness inside
Mounted on a spear
Forced to stare
As the destroyers
Move...Towards our doom
As we look at it
All engulfing
All knowing
All seeing
Burning a hole, through our hearts
Burning a path, through our minds
Opening our eyes, so we can see
See the truth,
see our doom
Force us... to realize
That we are our OWN doom
We are nothing but puppets
Puppets to ourselves
Moving
Backwards
Forwards
To our own gloomy doom
A flaming eye
Staring into us
Staring back at us
Engulfing us
In it's eternal stare
We will never
Rise up
Open our eyes
Open our minds
To the truth
Dark as it may be
It is there
Inside us
Around us
Everywhere
At all times
Our dark hearts
Our twisted minds
Accustumed to
The staring eye
Always there
Always here
Inside us
Around us
All engulfing
All surrounding
Fire and dust
The earths, crust
Rotting...Remains
NOTHING...Remains
In this graveyard
That we call home
We are conquerors
Destroyers
Saviors
Blessed be our holy name
For we are god
God is us
And we will end
At our own hands
Fallen angels
Ascended demons
We are both
Yet none, we are in the middle
Doomed to forge our own paths
Carve a path, a path to where?
Home?
Paradise?
Nowhere at all?
Or everywhere?
It is not our descisions that matters
Yet, it is all that matters
On this path
Leading to a place, far away, yet within reach
But as you reach for it, the eye stares
The eternale stare
Staring into, our souls
Our very essence
What makes us, us
It sees us, it loathes us
It wishes for nothing
But our demise
Yet it is, unable
To take action
For we, carve our own path
A path leading, to what, and to where
No-one will, or wants to thred
A burning eye, a fiery hole
Staring into
Eternity
Unto us
Under it's fiery glare
A burning eye, a fiery glare
osiris01.proboards86.com/index.cgi?action=display&board=ficfeedback&thread=1195163106
A LOT longer than my usual ones, though written in a simmilar style...In one second I am rambling on MSN, and one and a half hour later I sit with a two page poem... = /
Enjoy!
A flaming eye
Darkness inside
Mounted on a spear
Forced to stare
As the destroyers
Move...Towards our doom
As we look at it
All engulfing
All knowing
All seeing
Burning a hole, through our hearts
Burning a path, through our minds
Opening our eyes, so we can see
See the truth,
see our doom
Force us... to realize
That we are our OWN doom
We are nothing but puppets
Puppets to ourselves
Moving
Backwards
Forwards
To our own gloomy doom
A flaming eye
Staring into us
Staring back at us
Engulfing us
In it's eternal stare
We will never
Rise up
Open our eyes
Open our minds
To the truth
Dark as it may be
It is there
Inside us
Around us
Everywhere
At all times
Our dark hearts
Our twisted minds
Accustumed to
The staring eye
Always there
Always here
Inside us
Around us
All engulfing
All surrounding
Fire and dust
The earths, crust
Rotting...Remains
NOTHING...Remains
In this graveyard
That we call home
We are conquerors
Destroyers
Saviors
Blessed be our holy name
For we are god
God is us
And we will end
At our own hands
Fallen angels
Ascended demons
We are both
Yet none, we are in the middle
Doomed to forge our own paths
Carve a path, a path to where?
Home?
Paradise?
Nowhere at all?
Or everywhere?
It is not our descisions that matters
Yet, it is all that matters
On this path
Leading to a place, far away, yet within reach
But as you reach for it, the eye stares
The eternale stare
Staring into, our souls
Our very essence
What makes us, us
It sees us, it loathes us
It wishes for nothing
But our demise
Yet it is, unable
To take action
For we, carve our own path
A path leading, to what, and to where
No-one will, or wants to thred
A burning eye, a fiery hole
Staring into
Eternity
Unto us
Under it's fiery glare
A burning eye, a fiery glare